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PostSubject: Need opinion on a poem   Need opinion on a poem I_icon_minitimeNovember 27th 2010, 4:59 pm

I got bored and wrote a poem. Some parts of it suck, but wanted to see what some others would say about it. Don't care if the review is good or bad. It doesnt bother me any.
Its called My Precious Strings

I miss the days where everyone was together.
I miss the days that have now gone astray.
I miss the days where we thought we were bffs for sure.
Those days are the past, and slowly faded away.
Arguing and fighting over the stupidest things.
Got tired of it all, I stuck to my strings.
As I stood and saw people, falling through the cracks.
So far down below, and never coming back.
Feeling betrayed, I had said not a word no more.
Not to anyone, to myself I swore.
But some things just cannot be kept.
And for that I am stuck in a forever dept.
Most of my friends are left in the past.
I guess some things aren't meant to last.
These days have quickly, gone by fast.
So fast and that I cannot regrasp.
Days on by, for years and years
I have stayed to myself days on end.
But inside I have no tears to shed
Nor any blood that is to be bled.
Hopefully one day the good will rise again.
Things will be back the ways they have been.
Down in darkness, born will be wings
As I sit here and strum, my precious strings.

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PostSubject: Re: Need opinion on a poem   Need opinion on a poem I_icon_minitimeNovember 27th 2010, 5:42 pm

Its good. Very heartfelt and emotion bound. I like it.

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PostSubject: Re: Need opinion on a poem   Need opinion on a poem I_icon_minitimeNovember 27th 2010, 7:29 pm

Nice Work Zienna Emperor

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Glad you guys like it.
Lol i wrote this half asleep at 3 in the morning btw.

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PostSubject: Re: Need opinion on a poem   Need opinion on a poem I_icon_minitimeDecember 3rd 2010, 11:21 pm

Well its good.

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PostSubject: Re: Need opinion on a poem   Need opinion on a poem I_icon_minitimeDecember 14th 2010, 8:14 pm

Death awaits...
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Martyr has a point

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PostSubject: Re: Need opinion on a poem   Need opinion on a poem I_icon_minitimeDecember 15th 2010, 5:46 pm

Historian Martyr wrote:
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Martyr has a point

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PostSubject: Re: Need opinion on a poem   Need opinion on a poem I_icon_minitimeDecember 22nd 2010, 7:54 pm

I think its good, very powerful...i write poems consistently myself. There were a few lines that seemed to long in consideration with the rest otherwise it flowed nicely and the point was given well.
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PostSubject: Re: Need opinion on a poem   Need opinion on a poem I_icon_minitimeDecember 22nd 2010, 10:52 pm

Ca'Verd wrote:
I think its good, very powerful...i write poems consistently myself. There were a few lines that seemed to long in consideration with the rest otherwise it flowed nicely and the point was given well.
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Like i said, "3 in the morning." x)

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Aye, i suppose. I only write good at that time when i've already stayed up all night...LOL!


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